BPG Original Linear Issue #1

PAGE ONE (one panel)

 

Panel 1. IRENE is holding KYLE in the middle of the Dilbane Middle School Gymnasium.  KYLE has a knife wound where his mid-sternum is.  He is bleeding out of the wound, his mouth, and one of his nostrils.  IRENE is huddled over KYLE; she is crying.  Shoes of spectators can be seen standing in a circle around the dying boy and his friend.

 

1 KYLE (narration box)         MY NAME IS KYLE RICHARD. I WAS 13 YEARS OLD.

  (seperate box, top of the page)

THIS IS HOW I DIE.  AT THE TIME I REALLY NEVER THOUGHT THINGS WOULD HAVE GONE THIS FAR. 

  (seperate box, middle of the page to the side slightly)

I'M NOT IN THAT MUCH PAIN, I'M IN SHOCK YOU SEE.  I DON'T FEEL ANYTHING.

  (seperate box, bottom of the page.)

THIS IS HOW I DIE.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

PAGE TWO (five panels)

 

Panel 1. KYLE is on his knees in front of KEVIN'S grocery store.  Close-up on KYLE.

KYLE is crying.  His nose is bleeding.  The giant window that says GROCERY in the front of

the store can be seen in the background out of focus.

 

1 KYLE (narration box)                     THIS IS HOW I LIVED.

 

Panel 2. NICK and JOSH are standing in front of KYLE with confident and entertained smirks on their faces.  NICK is the closest and is clearly in charge.

 

1 KYLE (narration box)                     THE TOWN I LIVED IN. DILBANE.

 

2 NICK:                                              YOU SHOULDA LEARNED BY NOW NOT TO RUN, BITCH-BOY.  IF YOU JUST GIVE US THE SH*T WE WANT.

 

Panel 3. Close-up of KYLE. He is closing his eyes, still crying.

 

1 KYLE(narration box)                      IT RESIDES IN A CORNER OF SOUTHERN INDIANA.

 

2 KYLE:                                             I NEED THAT MONEY FOR LUNCH 'TIL THE END OF THE WEEK.  PLEASE… JUST LEAVE ME ALONE.

 

Panel 4. The camera is behind KYLE.  NICK hits KYLE with the back of his hand (a’bitch’ slap). The hand is already in the completed smacking position.  Blood flies out of KYLE's mouth.  This is used to demean KYLE even further, because NICK doesn’t even see him as enough of a threat to punch him.  No Dialogue.

 

Panel 5. Close-up on KYLE's face.  Blood is streaming out of his mouth.  The look on KYLE'S face is pure hate.  KYLE’S eyes are glossed over somewhat.  He’s on the verge of crying. No Dialogue.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

PAGE THREE (six panels)

 

Panel 1. KYLE is rushing NICK.  The camera angle is from behind NICK and JOSH.  KYLE'S hateful look is even more furious.  KYLE’S teeth are clentched.  KYLE’S arms are bent and he is running somewhat awkwardly.  KYLE has virtually no fighting experience or training.  He is acting on emotion and necessity.

 

1 KYLE:                                             LEAVE ME ALONE!

 

Panel 2. The camera angle is from the side facing the store.  NICK is kneeing KYLE in the stomach. KYLE is a lot shorter than NICK so his knee doesn’t have to come up very high.

 

1 NICK:                                              F*CK YOU.

 

Panel 3. KYLE is huddled over in pain.  NICK is walking toward him from about five feet away.  KEVIN can be seen walking out of the store.  The view is from slightly above the characters, but slightly isometric.

 

1 KEVIN:                                           WHAT THE HELL IS GOING ON HERE?  KYLE?

 

Panel 4. KEVIN is now standing in front of KYLE.  The back of NICK and JOSH'S heads can be seen at the bottom of the panel.

 

1 KEVIN:                                           YOU TWO LITTLE BASTARDS GET OUT OF HERE.  NOW!  I DON'T CARE WHO YOUR DAD IS, NICK.  I’LL BEAT THE HELL OUT OF YOU IF I SEE YOU AROUND HERE AGAIN.

 

Panel 5.  KEVIN, being a tall man, intimidates the boys.  They run away.  The view is from NICK’S perspective.  NICK is looking back while they both run away. No Dialogue.

 

Panel 6. KEVIN has his hand under KYLE's armpit helping him into the store.  No Dialogue.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

PAGE FOUR (Five panels)

 

Panel 1. KYLE is sitting in front of the large pane glass window with the word GROCERY on it backwards (due to them being inside).  KYLE is still crying. 

 

1 KEVIN (off panel)                            ARE YOU OKAY?  I'LL GET YOU SOME ICE AND

SOME GAUZE.

 

Panel 2. KYLE is looking up at KEVIN.  KEVIN is still out of panel.

 

1 KYLE:                                             I'M NOT BLEEDING THAT BADLY.  ICE… WOULD BE FINE.

 

2 KYLE (narration box):                    THIS IS KEVIN HEDMIN.  KEVIN OWNS THIS GROCERY STORE AND IS A FRIEND OF MY MOM'S. 

 

Panel 3. KEVIN is handing KYLE a plastic bag of ice.  Camera angle is from the side.

 

KYLE (narration box)                        THE JACKASS DOING THE TALKING WAS NICK VYLE.  HIS DAD IS THE MAYOR OF DILBANE.  HIS TOADY WAS JOSH CONRIGHT.  THIS ISN'T THE FIRST TIME I HAD MY ASS HANDED TO ME BY NICK AND HIS THUGS.

 

Panel 4.  KYLE is holding the ice up to his head.  He is in the middle of getting up in the panel.  The view is from the side and KEVIN is standing next to KYLE.

 

1 KEVIN:                                           I'LL KEEP AN EYE OUT WHEN SCHOOL IS GETTING OUT.  JUST COME BY HERE IF YOU WANT.  THOSE LITTLE CREEPS AREN'T GONNA TOUCH YOU WITH ME WATCHING.

 

2 KYLE:                                             THANKS, MR. HEDMIN.  AL HAS BEEN LOOKING OUT FOR ME, BUT HE HAD TO STAY AFTER SCHOOL FOR SOME SORT OF STUDY SESSION TODAY.

 

3 KEVIN:                                           I WISH THE SCHOOL OR THE COPS WOULD DO SOMETHING, BUT WITH HIS DAD BEING MAYOR AN' ALL. 

 

Panel 5. Close-up on KEVIN.

 

1 KEVIN:                                           SH*TTY WAY FOR A KID TO FIND OUT HOW THE REAL WORLD WORKS.

 

PAGE FIVE (four panels)

 

Panel 1. Camera is close up on KYLE.  He has the bag of ice on the left side of his head.  He face looks surprised and embarrassed.

 

1 IRENE (off panel)                           DAD, SORRY I'M LATE, THE TEACH... ER.

 

Panel 2. Close up on IRENE.  She has a worried look on her face.

 

1 IRENE:                                            KYLE?  WHAT HAPPENED TO YOUR...?

 

Panel 3. KYLE is opening the door to the outside of the store, running past IRENE.  No Dialogue.

 

Panel 4. KYLE is seen from the behind running down the sidewalk.

 

1 KYLE (narration box)                     THIS IS HOW I LIVED.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

SIX (five panels)

 

Panel 1. KYLE is sitting on his bed.  The camera angle is from above to see his room from a top down view.  He is holding his knees. His head is resting on the top of his knees with his face down.

 

1 KYLE (narration box)                     IRENE. 

  (new box)                              IRENE IS ONE OF TWO FRIENDS I HAD BACK THEN.  THE OTHER IS AL. 

 

Panel 2. Close up on KYLE looking at the wall in his room.

 

1 KYLE (narration box)                     NICK, JOSH, AND HIS FRIENDS HAVE BEEN AT THIS SINCE I WAS SIX. 

(new box)                                THINGS HAVE BEEN GETTING WORSE AT THIS POINT.  I NEVER TRIED TO FIGHT BACK BEFORE THAT DAY.  MAYBE THAT'S WHAT STARTED TO SPIN THINGS OUT OF CONTROL.

 

Panel 3. KAREN (KYLE'S MOTHER) walks through the door.  Both her and KYLE can be seen from this panel's camera perspective. 

 

1 KAREN:                                          I KNOW THAT THEY DID THIS TO YOU.  I KNOW YOU'RE EMBARRASSED, BUT IF YOU WOULD JUST TELL ME WHICH ONES DID THIS?  WAS IT THE MAYOR'S BOY?

 

2 KYLE:                                             I'M FINE.  JUST LEAVE ME ALONE.

 

3 KAREN:                                          KYLE...

 

Panel 4. Close-up on KAREN.

 

1 KAREN:                                          I CALLED THE SCHOOL ANYWAY.  THEY SAID THAT THE MAYOR SAYS HE PICKED HIS SON UP FROM SCHOOL TODAY.  SO WHO WAS IT?

 

2 KYLE:                                             I JUST... I DON'T WANT TO TALK ABOUT IT.

 

KYLE (narration box)                        SHE DIDN'T KNOW WHAT TO DO.  I WOULDN'T LET HER IN.  I THOUGHT THERE WAS NOTHING SHE COULD DO.

(new box)                                MOM…

(more)

 

Panel 5. KAREN is facing away from KYLE as a single tear flows from her closed eyes as she exits the room.

 

KYLE (narration box)                        SHE DID WHAT SHE COULD.  TALKED TO THE SCHOOL AND THE POLICE, BUT WITH NICK BEING WHO HE WAS...

(new box)                                KEVIN CALLED THE SCHOOL ALSO TELLING THEM WHAT HE SAW.  THEY SAID THAT THE TEACHERS WOULD KEEP AN EYE ON ME. 

(new box)                                IRENE TOLD ME THIS LATER ON. 

(new box)                                I THINK THE SCHOOL WASN'T GOING TO LIFT A FINGER UNLESS I ENDED UP IN THE HOSPITAL.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

PAGE SEVEN (six panels)

 

Panel 1. KYLE and AL are walking down the halls of Dilbane Middle School.  It’s in between classes, so there are other students walking by them in hall.  Teachers standing by their classrooms in their respective doorways.

 

1 KYLE(narration box)                      THIS IS AL.  ALBERT MADDINGTON III TO BE ENTIRELY ACCURATE.  HIS DAD WAS A SUCCESSFUL VICE PRESIDENT AT A COMPANY OF SOME SORT.  I NEVER REALLY CARED THAT MUCH ABOUT IT AT THE TIME.

 

2 AL:                                                   SO NOTHING'S GOING TO HAPPEN THEN?  I'M NOT AS SURPRISED AS I SHOULD BE, BUT NICK'S DAD PRETTY MUCH OWNS THE COPS.  THE FIGHT WASN'T ON SCHOOL PROPERTY…

 

3 KYLE:                                             THE OTHER TIMES THEY DID THIS TO ME WERE. AND THEY DIDN'T DO ANYTHING THEN.

 

Panel 2.  The angle is from the front now and KYLE is looking forward.  AL is looking down at KYLE being that he is quite a bit taller than KYLE.

 

1 KYLE(narration box)                      AL SHOULD BE GOING TO A PRIVATE SCHOOL LIKE NICK SHOULD BE.  NICK GOT KICKED OUT OF THE ONES HIS DAD PUT HIM IN.  AL TOLD ME HE COULDN'T STAND THE SNOBS THERE.  HIS DAD DIDN'T MIND NOT SPENDING THE MONEY.

 

2 KYLE:                                             IRENE SAW ME.  WHEN I WAS HURT.  WHEN I WAS CRYING.

 

3 AL:                                                   THAT SUCKS.  I KNOW YOU LIKE HER AND ALL, BUT I DON'T THINK SHE THINKS YOU'RE A PUSSY OR ANYTHING.  SHE'S A NICE CHICK.  I MEAN SHE'S FRIENDS WITH YOU.

 

4 KYLE:                                             AND I'M LIKE SOCIAL POISON. 

(more)

 

 

 

 

 

 

Panel 3. The angle is from the side of KYLE’S face.  AL'S chest can be seen walking slightly in front of KYLE on the opposite side.

 

1 KYLE(narration box)                      IRENE STILL DID OKAY WITH FRIENDS, BUT THEY MADE FUN OF HER WHEN SHE TALKED TO ME.  SHE SAID IT DIDN'T BOTHER HER. 

(new box)                                SHE WAS NEVER GOOD AT LYING.

 

2 KYLE:                                             I'M TIRED OF THIS.  NICK AND HIS BITCHES DO THIS SH*T TO ME ALL OF THE TIME.  THIS TIME SHE SAW WHAT THEY DID TO ME... AT LEAST WHAT I LOOKED LIKE AFTERWARDS.

 

3 AL:                                                   I'LL STICK WITH YOU AFTER SCHOOL.  THEY WON'T TOUCH YOU WHEN I'M AROUND.

 

Panel 4. The angle is closer just on KYLE.  KYLE is closing his eyes.

 

1 KYLE(narration box)                      THIS WAS TRUE LATELY.  AL TOOK UP FOR ME WHEN HE COULD.  NICK CONTROLLED THE SCHOOL SOCIALLY.  IF HE DIDN'T LIKE YOU, FEW WOULD TALK TO YOU.  AL BUSTED NICK'S LIP ONCE.  AFTER SCHOOL NICK'S FIVE-KID CREW GANGED UP ON AL.  THREE OF THEM WERE BLEEDING BY THE END, BUT THERE WERE TOO MANY OF THEM.  AL WOKE UP UNCONSCIOUS IN THE PARKING LOT A HOUR LATER.  HE NEEDED FOUR STITCHES IN HIS FOREHEAD.   

 

2 KYLE:                                             YOU CAN'T BE WITH ME ALL OF THE TIME.  GETTING BY ISN'T GOOD ENOUGH ANYMORE.  I WANT TO EVEN THINGS OUT.

 

3 AL:                                                   THAT MIGHT NOT BE THE BEST IDEA.  I MEAN THEY'RE BAD NOW.  WHAT HAPPENS WHEN THEY HAVE A GRUDGE AGAINST YOU?

 

Panel 5. The angle is from the front on KYLE.  KYLE'S eyes are open and staring into the panel (at the reader).

 

1 KYLE: I DON'T CARE.

(more)

 

 

 

 

Panel 6. The angle is on KYLE and AL from the back.

 

1 AL:                                                   WHAT DO YOU HAVE IN MIND THEN?  I WOULDN'T MIND SEEING THOSE ASSES TASTE THEIR OWN MEDICINE.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

PAGE EIGHT (five panels)

 

Panel 1.  KYLE and AL are seen walking through the middle school auditorium.  KYLE has a paintball gun and duct tape in each hand respectively.  AL has a roll of fishing line and a white tupperware container in each hand respectively.  They are both wearing different clothing than they were in the previous panel.  This is due to the current panel taking place the next day.

 

1 KYLE(narration box, but a different one from the past tense ones scattered throughout)

DO YOU KNOW WHAT HAPPENS IN THE AUDITORIUM TOMORROW?

 

2 AL(narration box)                            NO.

 

3 KYLE (nb)                                       STUDENT COUNCIL ELECTION SPEECHES.  GUESS WHO'S UP FIRST.

 

Panel 2. KYLE is kneeling at a wooden podium with a paintball gun.  The angle is from the side showing him shoving the gun under the podium.

 

1 KYLE (nb)                                       I PLAN TO TAKE MY PAINTBALL GUN, DUCT TAPE, AND FISHING LINE TO RIG UP A NASTY SURPRISE FOR NICK.  HE GOES FIRST.  THERE IS A HOLE NEXT TO THE MICROPHONE IN THE PODIUM AND ENOUGH ROOM I BELIEVE TO RIG UP A PAINTBALL GUN SO IT SHOOTS OUT OF THE HOLE.

 

2 AL (nb)                                            HOW ARE YOU GONNA SHOOT IT?

 

Panel 3. KYLE is standing behind the podium looking at it checking the trajectory.

 

1 KYLE (nb)                                       FISHING LINE ATTACHED TO THE TRIGGER.

 

2 AL (nb)                                            NICK'S MOOD ISN'T GOING TO IMPROVE WHEN HE GETS A PAINTBALL TO THE FACE IN FRONT OF THE ENTIRE SCHOOL.

(more)

 

 

 

 

 

Panel 4. KYLE and AL are walking out of the auditorium from the same view that showed them walking in.

 

1 KYLE (nb)                                       I'M NOT PUTTING A PAINTBALL IN IT.  I SAID IT WAS A NASTY SURPRISE, NOT A PAINFUL ONE.  WHEN IT HAPPENS THOUGH, HE'LL WISH IT WERE A PAINTBALL HITTING HIM IN THE FACE.

 

Panel 5. KYLE and AL are now in present time walking into their class together.

 

1 KYLE:                                             I'LL SHOW YOU WHEN WE GET HERE EARLY TOMORROW.  HOPEFULLY NO ONE LOOKS UNDER THE PODIUM BEFOREHAND.  THERE'S A DOOR UNDERNEATH, SO THEY SHOULDN'T SEE IT RIGHT OFF.

 

2 AL:                                                   IRENE WILL KILL YOU IF SHE FINDS OUT YOU'RE EGGING THIS SH*T ON.

 

3 KYLE:                                             THAT'S WHY YOU'RE NOT GOING TO TELL HER. 'K?

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

PAGE NINE (six panels)

 

Panel 1. IRENE and KYLE are sitting in the library of Dilbane Middle School.  The angle is from the side.  They are looking at their books.  No dialogue.

 

Panel 2. IRENE looks up at KYLE.  Same angle.

 

1 IRENE:                                            I'M KNOW YOU'RE EMBARRASSED ABOUT YESTER...

 

2 KYLE:                                             I'M NOT.

 

3 IRENE:                                            YOU SURE?  YOU SEEMED EMBARRASSED.

 

4 KYLE:                                             I'M NOT, SO DON'T WORRY ABOUT IT.

 

Panel 3. Same panel as panel 1.

 

1 IRENE:                                            'CAUSE IT'S NOT YOUR FAULT.

 

2 KYLE:                                             I KNOW.  IT'S JUST...

 

Panel 4. KYLE looks up at IRENE.  Same angle.

 

1 KYLE:                                             I DIDN'T WANT YOU TO SEE ME LIKE THAT. 

 

2 IRENE:                                            I DON'T THINK YOU'RE WEAK, BECAUSE...

 

3 KYLE:                                             THIS ISN'T MAKING ME FEEL BETTER. 

 

4 IRENE:                                            I'M SORRY...

 

Panel 5. Both IRENE and KYLE are looking at each other. Same angle.

 

1 KYLE:                                             HOW DO YOU KNOW WHAT I'M THINKING?  DID AL TELL YOU WHAT I THOUGHT YOU MIGHT THINK...?

 

2 IRENE:                                            NO.  I JUST KNOW.  I KNOW YOU.  I KNEW THAT YOU WERE EMBARRASSED AND NEEDED TO KNOW THAT I DIDN'T THINK LESS OF YOU.

(more)

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

(Continue)

Panel 6. Close-up on IRENE looking at KYLE.

 

1 IRENE:                                            DON'T DO SOMETHING RASH 'CAUSE OF ME.  DON'T GO AFTER NICK OR JOSH OR ANYTHING.  OKAY?

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

PAGE TEN (six panels)

 

Panel 1. The auditorium is filling up.  Students pour in for the student council election.  There is a banner over the stage that says 'Student Council Election'.

 

1 KYLE (nb)                                       THIS IS WHERE THINGS CHANGED.  I WISH I COULD GO BACK AND JUST LET BEING HUMILATED IN FRONT OF A GIRL I HAD A CRUSH ON GO.  BUT I CAN'T. 

 

2 TEACHER:                                     PLEASE BE SEATED.  THE SPEECHES WILL BEGIN SOON.

 

Panel 2. KYLE is seated next to AL.  The view is from the side on KYLE'S face. 

 

1 KYLE:                                             THIS IS IT.

 

2 AL:                                                   YOU GOT THE LINE?

 

Panel 3. KYLE'S hand is shown gripping the fishing line.

 

1 KYLE: YEAH. 

 

Panel 4. NICK is taking the stage for his speech.

 

1 TEACHER:                                     THE FIRST SPEECH OF THE CANIDATES FOR STUDENT COUNCIL IS NICK VILE.  PLEASE BE SILENT AS HE GIVES HIS SPEECH.

 

Panel 5. NICK is at the podium now.  The angle is from inside the hole where the paintball gun is.

 

1 NICK:                                              HEY, I'M NICK VILE, A LOT OF YOU KNOW ME FROM CLASS AND FOOTBALL AND I WANNA TELL YOU WHY YOU SHOULD VOTE FOR ME FOR STUDENT COUNCIL.  I'M LIKED BY MY CLASSMATES, SO I CAN BRIDGE GAPS BETWEEN THE SOCIAL GROUPS AND...

 

Panel 6. Close up on KYLE.  He is gritting his teeth.

 

1 KYLE:                                             ENOUGH OF THIS BULLSH*T.

 

 

 

 

PAGE ELEVEN (five panels)

 

Panel 1. KYLE is pulling the string lined underneath the chairs to the podium.  The angle is from above.  No dialogue.

 

Panel 2. Close up on NICK from the front.

 

1 NICK:                                               ... AND I FEEL THAT I WOULD BE THE BEST

CHOICE...

 

Panel 3. NICK is getting splattered with a chuck of red, bloody, chunky, raw hamburger meat from within the hole.  With a lot of it going into his mouth.

 

Panel 4.  NICK is bending over vomiting on the stage.  Teachers are running up to help. 

 

Panel 5. Close up on KYLE smiling.  Other kids are either laughing or look horrified.

 

1 KYLE (nb)                                       I SMILED.  I WAS SO HAPPY.  I FELT SO ACCOMPLISHED.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

PAGE TWELVE (four panels)

 

Panel 1. Close up on NICK.  He is getting helped out by teachers.  He is looking straight into the panel, at Kyle.

 

1 KYLE (nb)                                       HE KNEW IT WAS ME.  NO QUESTION IN HIS MIND.  HE LOOKED RIGHT AT ME.

 

Panel 2. Close up on KYLE walking out and looking back at NICK.

 

1 KYLE (nb)                                       LIKE I SAID.  STARTING AT THAT MOMENT, THINGS STARTED TO GET REALLY BAD.

 

Panel 3. NICK is sitting in the principal's office.  The principal's desk can be seen slightly , NICK is sitting completely in frame.

 

1 PRINCIPAL:                                   SO YOU HAVE NO IDEA WHO WOULD DO SOMETHING LIKE THIS?

 

2 NICK:                                              NO.

 

 

Panel 4. Close up on NICK.  His eyes are glossed over as if he was about to cry or had been crying.

 

1 NICK:                                              NO CLUE.  NO CLUE WHAT-SO-EVER.

 

Panel 5. Close up on NICK's eye.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

PAGE THIRTEEN (six panels)

 

Panel 1. IRENE and KYLE are sitting in the back of KEVIN'S car.  Side view of the car from outside.  KYLE is on the right side of the car (from the sitting position).  The view is of that side.  IRENE is leaning forward talking to KYLE.

 

1 IRENE:                                            I CAN'T BELIEVE YOU!

 

Panel 2. The angle is from the front looking at the back seat. 

 

1 KYLE:                                             WHAT ARE YOU TALKING ABOUT?

 

2 IRENE:                                            I KNOW IT WAS YOU.  WHAT WAS THAT ON HIS FACE?

 

3 KYLE:                                             HAMBURGER MEAT AND BLOOD.

 

4 IRENE:                                            EW.

 

Panel 3. The angle is further toward the front of the car so KEVIN is in frame.  IRENE is looking at KEVIN and yelling.

 

1 KEVIN:                                           WOW, HOW'D YOU GET IT TO SHOOT OUT AT THE RIGHT TIME?

 

2 IRENE:                                            DAD! I'M TRYING TO MAKE A POINT HERE.

 

3 KYLE:                                             PAINTBALL GUN AND FISHING LINE.

 

4 KEVIN:                                           NICE.

 

Panel 4. Same angle.  Irene is looking at Kyle.

 

1 IRENE:                                            NICE?  THAT’S WHY I HAD DAD PICK US UP.  NICK ISN'T GOING TO HOLD BACK NOW. 

 

2 KYLE:                                             I DON'T CARE.

 

(more)

 

 

 

 

 

 

Panel 5. Close-up on IRENE.  She is closing her eyes.  Her face has gone from angry to sad and frightened.

 

KYLE (naration box)                          SHE DID.  SHE KNEW.  I KNEW.  I KNEW THEY WOULD COME FOR ME.  THERE WAS NOTHING WE COULD DO ABOUT IT.

 

1 IRENE:                                            DAD CAN'T GET YOU EVERY DAY AND YOUR MOM WORKS RIGHT NOW.  ONE DAY, AL ISN'T GOING TO BE THERE.  THEY'LL GET YOU.  THEY'LL... THEY'LL...

 

2 KYLE:                                             I HAD TO PROVE SOMETHING TO MYSELF.

 

Panel 6. Close up on KYLE.

 

1 KYLE:                                             THAT I'M NOT A PUSH OVER.  I NEEDED THIS FOR MYSELF.  THAT'S WHY I DIDN'T TELL ANYONE ELSE.  I DON'T NEED THE RECOGNITION. 

 

2 KYLE (narration box)                     SHE DIDN'T SAY ANYTHING THE REST OF THE RIDE HOME.  I KNOW SHE WASN'T THAT PISSED AT ME.  SHE WAS SCARED.  JUST LIKE I WAS.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

PAGE FOURTEEN (four panels)

 

Panel 1. KYLE is riding his bike to school.  He is on the sidewalk and the angle is from the front.  The bike is a little rusty in spots.

 

1 KYLE (narration box)                     I FIXED UP A BIKE I FOUND IN THE GARAGE

THAT NIGHT.  I WAS AFRAID THAT THE CRAPPY TIRES WOULDN'T HOLD AIR... BUT THEY DID.

 

Panel 2. KYLE is locking his bike up at the rack at school.

 

2 KYLE (narration box)                     I EXPECTED THEM TO BE THERE.  NICK AND JOSH.  THEY WEREN'T.

 

Panel 3. KYLE is walking up the steps to school.  

 

KYLE (narration box) I EXPECTED THEM TO COME FOR ME.  ALL DAY.  IN THE HALLS.  AT LUNCH.  (separate box) NOTHING.

 

Panel 4. KYLE is walking down the steps.  The shadows and sunlight have adjusted from the morning panel (panel 3).

 

1 KYLE (narration box)                     THAT'S WHEN I SAW IT. 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

PAGE FIFTEEN (two panels)

 

Panel 1.  KYLE is walking toward his bike.  Then angle is from behind and you can see a yellow sticky note on the bike. No dialogue.

 

Panel 2. Close up on the note.  The note says, "YOU'LL NEVER GET HOME"

 

1 KYLE (narration box at the bottom of the page so you read the note first)                                                                                               THE TIRES WERE FINE.  THE BIKE WASN'T                                                                            TOUCHED.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

PAGE SIXTEEN (four panels)

 

Panel 1. KYLE is riding his bike as fast as he can.  Stress and fear is evident on his face.

 

1 KYLE (narration box)                     I THOUGHT I SHOULD HAVE LISTENED TO IRENE.  THIS IN ITSELF WASN'T WORTH IT.  THE FEAR.  THE UNSTOPPABLE AVALANCHE OF DREAD. 

 

Panel 2. KYLE looks behind him.  The angle is from behind so you see the tears in KYLE'S eyes.

 

1 KYLE (narration box)                     IF THAT FEELING IN ITSELF WASN'T WORTH GETTING EVEN WITH NICK…

 

Panel 3. The angle is in front of KYLE.  KYLE is still looking back.  NICK, JOSH, and two other kids on bikes are behind him.  NICK was smiling.  The others look angry.

 

1 KYLE(narration box)                      WHAT CAME NEXT MUST HAVE BEEN WORTH GETTING EVEN FIFTY TIMES OVER.

 

Panel 4. KYLE is looking forward now.  His face is a little more serious.  He has a tear dripping out of his visible eye.

 

1 KYLE (narration box)                     I KNEW IF I COULD GET TO KEVIN'S STORE I WOULD BE FINE.  THEY WOULD BACK OFF. 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

PAGE SEVENTEEN (four panels)

 

Panel 1. The angle is from the same side, but from further away.  NICK is pulling up next to KYLE of the left.  KYLE is no longer crying.

 

1 KYLE (narration box)                     THEY KNEW THAT TOO.  OF COURSE THEY KNEW THAT.

(seperate box)                          I WAS CUT OFF FROM MY ESCAPE.

 

Panel 2. KYLE is turning right.  The others are in pursuit.  No cars on the street as they are riding on.

 

1 KYLE (narration box)                     I WASN'T GOING TO GET BEAT UP AGAIN.  I HAD TO SLOW THEM DOWN.

 

Panel 3. KYLE tosses his backpack behind him.  The angle is from the back with KYLE already letting go of the bag. No dialogue.

 

Panel 4. JOSH'S front wheel hits the bag.  His bike flips.  The panel's angle is from the front of the bike.  The back wheel is coming off the ground.  JOSH is already coming off his seat.  No dialogue.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

PAGE EIGHTEEN (five panels)

 

Panel 1. JOSH hits the ground.  His right arm is hitting the pavement then his face.  Blood is visible coming out of the respective wounds.  He is closing his eyes in pain and fear. The angle is from the ground looking back at JOSH'S face.  No dialogue.

 

Panel 2. The others are not stopping to help.  JOSH is lying in the middle of the street.  His face is bleeding and a pool of blood is forming next to his head.  The angle is from right beside his head with the other three attackers in the distance leaving him.  They are turning right.  No dialogue.

 

Panel 3. KYLE is riding and the angle is from the side.  The other three are very close behind him.  They are now in a park with grass and sidewalks.  No one is around besides them.

 

1 KYLE (narration box)                     IF THEY GAVE A CRAP ABOUT JOSH THAT MIGHT HAVE SLOWED THEM DOWN. 

(separate box)                                      BUT THEY DIDN’T.

 

Panel 4. KYLE is looking behind him and the angle is from the front.  The others are further behind than in the previous panel.  NICK has his bike turned to the side stopped.

 

1 KYLE:                                             THEY'RE GIVING UP?

 

Panel 5. KYLE is looking in front of him and the angle is from the front looking at his face.  His face is fearful.  NICK and the others are stopped in the background and standing.

 

1 KYLE:                                             OH SH*T!

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

PAGE NINETEEN (one panel)

 

Panel 1. Full page spread.  The angle is from KYLE's view and he is not in view.  A very, very steep set of stone steps are in from of him.  There are rails and flat parts in twenty step intervals and that pattern is repeated at least ten times which would equal two hundred steps.

 

KYLE (narration box)                        NO... NO THEY WEREN'T GIVING UP.  JUST LETTING ME BREAK MYSELF.