Bleed Out

This song reminds me a lot of the end of the original linear second issue of BPG.  I haven't fit this scene into the new format, but I know that I don't want to mess this the structure too much, only add detail...

 

Bleed Out by Blue October

 

 

 

 

 

 

PAGE FOURTEEN (four panels)

Panel 1. The shot is from behind. KYLE is looking up and sees NICK, JOSH, and the other three of the gang.

1 KYLE (narration box) WHY DIDN'T I FEEL HOW WRONG THIS WAS? THAT NICK'S DAD TOLD THEM TO STAY AWAY FROM ME. I SHOULD HAVE KNOWN SOMETHING CHANGED.

Panel 2. Close up on KYLE. He looks scared. He looks like he's trying to be brave.

1 KYLE: WHAT IS THIS?

Panel 3. KYLE is getting up to leave. The shot is from above. He is about five feet from the group. NO DIALOGUE.

Panel 4. Side shot of KYLE and NICK. NICK has a long kitchen knife (think Michael Myers) pointed at KYLE. NICK had gloves on. KYLE looks confused.

1 KYLE: NICK... WHAT ARE YOU DOING?

PAGE FIFTEEN (six panels)

Panel 1. NICK and co. have KYLE cornered against the lockers/bench. The shot is from behind NICK.

1 NICK: WHO DID YOU TELL?

2 KYLE: ABOUT... ABOUT WHAT? I DON'T...

Panel 2. Middle shot of Nick, his knife is visible.

1 NICK: ABOUT THE DRUGS. WHO DID YOU TELL? MY DAD FINDS OUT AND I'LL STAB YOU.

2 KYLE: NICK.

Panel 3. Extreme close up on KYLE. His eyes are glossy.

1 KYLE: I DON'T KNOW ANYTHING. I DON'T KNOW WHAT YOU'RE TALKING ABOUT. I SWEAR. I SWEAR ON MY MOM. I DON'T KNOW. I DON'T.

Panel 4. The shot is of NICK from the front. JOSH'S hand is on his shoulder. NICK'S face looks repentant. NO DIALOGUE.

Panel 5. NICK is jerking forward to look threatening. His foot is in a puddle of water. He is slipping forward.

1 NICK: WELL IF YOU EVER DID TELL ANY... SHIT!

Panel 6. The shot is from the side. NICK and KYLE'S faces are an inch from each other. KYLE has a shocked look on his face. NICK looks confused.

PAGE SIXTEEN (four panels)

Panel 1. The shot shows NICK from the front. He has fallen back and his on his butt. He looks terrified. The three friends are exiting behind JOSH and NICK.

1 NICK: I... I DIDN'T... I SLIPPED... I...

Panel 2. The shot is of KYLE from the front. He is sitting on the ground. He has the knife in his chest around where his sternum is. Blood is spreading across his gym shirt. Blood coming out of his nose. Tears are coming out of both eyes.

1 NICK (off panel): OH MY GOD.

Panel 3. The shot is from behind KYLE. NICK and JOSH are running out the door.

1 KYLE (narration box) I THOUGHT SOMEONE WOULD COME IN TO HELP ME. NO ONE HELPS ME. THEY LEFT ME. THEY LEFT ME TO DIE.

Panel 4. KYLE has fallen on his side. Close up on his face on the floor. He looks droggy, like his consciousness if fading gradually as he bleeds to death.

1 KYLE (narration box) EVERYTHING GETS SO BLURRY AT THIS POINT. MY SIGHT. MY HEARING.

PAGE SEVENTEEN (four panels)

Panel 1. KYLE is grabbing the knife in his chest while sitting up.

1 KYLE (narration box) I REMEMBER I WASN'T GOING TO DIE. NOT YET.

Panel 2. The knife is out of KYLE'S chest blood is in the air. The affect is supposed to convey the knife being pulled out. Only KYLE’S hands are shown, but not the rest of his body.

1 KYLE (narration box) NOT WITHOUT SEEING HER.

Panel 3. Kyle is leaning against the wall and exiting the locker room tracking blood behind him.

1 KYLE (narration box) IRENE.

Panel 4. KYLE is leaning and tracking blood down the hallway to two double doors that lead to the gym. NO DIALOGUE.

PAGE EIGHTEEN (six panels)

Panel 1. IRENE has a basketball in her hands. There are other girls playing in the background. A teacher is standing behind her also. She is just staring into the panel. NO DIALOGUE.

Panel 2. The shot is from behind her legs. The basketball is on the ground (as if she dropped it). KYLE is in the doorway.

1 IRENE: WHAT... NO.

Panel 3. KYLE is on the floor. IRENE is bending down over him.

1 IRENE: WHAT HAPPENED? NO, NO, NO. PLEASE... KYLE!

Panel 4. IRENE is looking behind at the teacher and students. They look like they are frozen.

1 IRENE: SOMEONE, ONE... ALL OF YOU... GET A F*CKING AMBULANCE YOU FUCKING MORONS! NOW!

Panel 5. IRENE is holding KYLE'S head up. She is crying.

1 KYLE (narration box) I HAD TROUBLE TALKING. I COULDN'T HEAR VERY WELL. I WAS GOING TO DIE AND I KNEW IT.

2 IRENE: NO, COME ON. DON'T GO. I CAN'T LOSE YOU LIKE THIS. PLEASE, I CAN'T LIVE. YOU CAN'T LEAVE US.

Panel 6. Close up on KYLE.

KYLE: I... NEEDED TO SEE YOU. I WANTED TO BE WITH YOU WHEN THE END CAME.

PAGE NINTEEN (two panels)

Panel 1. KYLE'S eyes are closed. He's gone. IRENE is hugging and crying over his dead body. NO DIALOGUE.

Panel 2. The gym floor is gone and there is nothing but KYLE and IRENE with black background.

KYLE (narration box) MY NAME IS KYLE RICHARD. THIS IS HOW I DIED.

Waiting... Please Stand By

Well if you hadn't noticed, the Kickstarter for BPG has been delayed for weeks.  Due to new regulations Amazon Payments need way more info than they used to.  I originally labeled BPG in the wrong business category (I would hardly call it a business at this point).  So I had to cancel my old account and start a new one.  Now they need my ID, so I sent it and they said it was too blurry.  So now I have to send it again.  So that's where we're at currently.  Waiting for Azon Pay to stop holding up the process.

Once this is all done, the Kickstarter can begin.  The Twitter Feed is the best place to get by the minute updates on the goings on of the comic. 

I was also considering using my own funds to get a page of in-comic art made, but something important came up... more news on that next week.  Stay Tuned.

-Jake dh

Kickstarter Reward Comparison



In case you're new to The BulletProof Ghost or Kickstarter, I'll give you the low down before I get into the rewards comparisons.  Kickstarter is a crowd funding website where people can pledge money towards different art projects.  Backers (as they're called) don't give money out of the kindness of their hearts.  Though most of them definitely want to see the projects come to fruition, the pot is sweetened by the rewards they are promised. 

The person running the Kickstarter Campaign promises rewards for each level of contribution.  The backers have to be registered with Kickstarter (just like all other websites with accounts and log ins) and they also need to have an Amazon.com account with a debit/credit card attached.  Then it's as simple as buying a VHS or a Sega Genesis cartridge (too old school?  It's like buying anything else on Amazon).  This means that the person running the Kickstarter can't pull more money out of your account or what have you.

Each money amount corresponds to a level within the campaign reward system.  Here is the first Kickstarter we did last year for an example.  This pics aren't showing up now for some reason... probably to save storage space since it's no longer active... Enjoy...

Pledge $1 or more:
Last year: Thanks on the website.

This year: Thanks on the website and in the comic both hard copy and digital.
Hopefully that will help a little.

Pledge $5 or more:
Last Year: All of the Above and Thanks in The BulletProof Ghost Issue #1: The Trials of Cybernetic Prototype 005 as well as a free digital copy of the issue.

This Year: Same, plus a free button pin.
I thought about giving a hard copy of Issue #1, but I would have to raise the goal amount, because I wouldn't be making anything off of the $5 level... so a button pin it is... I promise it will be a sweet ass button pin.

Pledge $10 or more:
Last Year: There was no $10 level.

This Year: All of the Above and Free Hard Copy of Issue #1, signed by Jake Harris and Scott Loesch.
Last year, you had to pledge $15 to get Issue #1's hard copy.  I'm bringing it a whole level down.  If you just want the comic, then $10 and I'll throw in the digital version, thanks on the website/in the comic and the sweet ass button pin.

Pledge $15 or more:
Last Year: All of the Above and Free Hardcopy of Issue #1, signed by Jake Harris and Scott Loesch; plus a free digital version of the script.

This Year: Same minus the digital version of the script.  I posted the scripts online since I did the first Kickstarter, there's no point in sending backers versions of the script at the moment.  The ADDITION will be a promotional comic with bios of all of the characters from the first arc.  This will more than likely include artwork not seen in the comic itself, as well as characters that won't be seen until later issues.  The only other way to get this Promo Comic, is to be at a convention that we're promoting at.  Last year this appeared as a bonus with the $100 level.

Pledge $20 or more:
Last Year: No $20 Level

This Year: All of the Above plus second hard copy with alternate cover.  This was originally at the $50 level, but this level seems more fitting for another hard copy.  The alternate cover will be funded directly from this campaign.  It will be an image of Kyle and Four facing off against each other with William in the background watching his creations destroy each other.

Pledge $25 or more:
Last Year: No $25 Level.  I skipped from $15 to $30 last time, which was a mistake.  People like to pledge at all types of levels and cutting those levels out might have been a deterrent.  I also maybe thought it would force people to pledge higher, which was a dick move and I apologize, besides I paid for it with an unsuccessful Kickstarter.

This Year: All of the Above plus a softback graphic novel version of Issue #1 with all concept art, promotional bio information, biographies on the creators and a preview to Issue #2.  I checked the pricing on Ka-blam and this is not only doable, but will give the backer all BPG content to date (at that point and time).  If we get over funded, I may even throw a little more into the graphic novel.

Pledge $30 or more:
Last Year: All of the above and BPG T-Shirt.

This year:  This level is the same... a bitchin' T-Shirt is yours with all of the other goodies at this level.  This is the best deal in my opinion.

Pledge $50 or more:
Last Year: All of the Above and also a special limited edition with alternate cover (Signed by Scott and Jake) and all concept art.

This Year:  This is now the $20 Level minus the concept art, which is now part of the $25 level.  Which leaves the question what will now happen to the $50 level... all of the other levels will be the same... $50 will now get you a large poster of the cover of Issue #1.  If the project is over funded, this may contain original art.

All of the other Levels will be the same, except $500 level.

Pledge $100 or more:

All of the Above and have likeness drawn into a minor character in actual comic as well as a signed and framed version of the panel in which you appear in.

 

Pledge $250 or more

All of the Above and Free ticket to Chicago Comic Con 2014 as part of the promotion crew. If the project has enough funding or the comic sells well enough, this may be changed to San Diego.  The only problem is if you can't make it to which ever convention (if there is a backer that can go to Chicago and not San Diego, I will make it 100% Chicago)... if you can't make it to either, but want something of equal value, I will grant you that.  Just message me through Kickstarter once the campaign begins (my name's Jake Harris).

 

Pledge $500 or more

Last Year: All of the Above and will help us run the booth/table at Chicago Comic Con 2012 as part of the promotion crew. 

 

This Year: This sounds like I'm putting the $500 back to work, which I didn't think about at the time I put this up.  If you give at $250, I don't see why if you wanted to help with the booth, why you couldn't.  I didn't think this one out last year, which is why the highest backer was at $200... he didn't want to get put to work.  So the $500 level is now All of the Above, plus all materials related to this First Arc of BPG.  This means you have faith that the comic will continue past Issue #1, but all graphic novels, comics, promotional materials, etc.  The first arc will more than likely be 6 issues long.  This will not include figures at first, but may if they are mass marketed later on.  It costs a lot to get that ball rolling.

 

Pledge $1,000 or more:

 

All of the Above and Free hotel stay and food ($100 allowance) for Chicago Comic Con 2014 as part of the promotion crew.

 

I don't think this will happen, but if you funded a fourth of this campaign and it succeeded?  You'd be worshipped the whole time you were hanging with us at Comic Con.  I'm also not promising it'll be a nice hotel... but we'll be in the same boat.

 

Pledge $2,500 or more

All of the Above and a custom made statuette of The BulletProof Ghost.

This costs hundreds of dollars to put in motion, but once it's made, I can make others for cheaper.  This will be over 50% of the funding.

Pledge $5,000 or more

0 backers

 

All of the above, every volume of BPG ever to be released as well as every piece of merch, advertising, and possible visits to the making of any alternate medium BPG expands to (animated, cinema, etc.). Something this huge would earn our eternal thanks and everything that follows will be result of your generosity.

 

I left the amount of backers on this one.  This is $1,000 more than we need to get the project rolling.  I might even interest anyone who wants to throw this type of money at my dream in a profit sharing agreement.  Message me at tremordeth@live.com if that is up your alley.

 

Well there it is.  I'll be putting the Kickstarter up before I go to sleep tonight, unless there is a complication of some sort (wouldn't surprise me).  Thanks for the interest.

 

-Jake dh

 

Script Archive

These are the current versions of the scripts for my independent comic book, The BulletProof Ghost.  These scripts will be changed and added to in the future, alterations will be noted both here and on the actual blog post that features the script.  Thanks for the interest and enjoy.

Current Versions                                      Bio Pages

Issue #1                                                       Arc #1

Original Linear Versions

Issue #1

Issue #2

Issue #3

Issue #4

Issue #5

Issue #6